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=Group 3: Siarrah Llarinas, Taylor Weeks, and Kala'i Garcia=

=Topic: Shark Finning=

Picture URLs make sure whatever pictures you guys use, you get the URLs for it or else we're gonna have to look for them later.

May 12, 2011

**Presentation**:
Powerpoint

Paper:
** The Final Shark Finning Paper ** most recent draft (the one we just turned in)

Research Paper Drafts:
Siarrah's draft Compiled rough draft.

Finished Rough Draft

Taylor's D2 edit

=TAYLOR:= there you go :)

=Siarrah:= =ETHICS:= added conclusion too

=Kala'i:=

wow my bad >.< i thought it would save as a small file :P
pages 3-11 are here:

Notes from teachers:
Pages 1 and 2 you can pretty much tell. Marshall is in red and Bonning is in blue Page 3: Marshall Bonning Page 4: Marshall Page 5: Marshall Page 6: Marshall Bonning Page 7: Marshall Bonning Page 8: Marshall Bonning Page 9: Marshall Bonning Page 10: Marshall Page 11: ALL GOOD!!!
 * "Balance of ocean" where does that lead too?
 * "Greatly affected" what does that mean?
 * "off-balanced set" needs explaining
 * reword lines 4-6 and explain why
 * "brown tides" where does that lead too?
 * Last paragraph is good!
 * Integrate quote
 * explain second paragraph
 * weave quote in third paragraph
 * "cultural practice" how is it cultural? is this explained anywhere?
 * emphasis on nation?
 * "to fin" verb? (no idea what that means)
 * explain the second quote in the second paragraph. (I think he means integrate it in to the paragraph)
 * what do you mean by prey of the sea?
 * First sentence isn't a paragraph
 * second paragraph needs a better transition sentences
 * explain the third paragraph
 * "fishers" Wrong word
 * "dent it" what do you mean?
 * "menu for that matter" what do you mean?
 * reword "they are no different to pain"
 * explain the first paragraph more
 * second paragraph is already explain but it has more detail, decide where it needs to be
 * "very informed" what does that mean?
 * same as Marshall about the second paragraph
 * are you making the argument that killing __anything i__s murder?
 * explain the first paragraph in relation to thesis
 * superstitions mentioned 11 times
 * "through his opinions shark fin soup can still be enjoyed but through a humanely manner" How?
 * define "reservations"
 * Change "Mercury" to "mercury"
 * (Shark Savers) not in Works cited

Bonning:
 * EXTRA NOTES**
 * This paper is a solid rough draft
 * some important ideas need expanding or more explanation: alternatives to SF soup, do we have the right to outlaw someone's culture
 * ethics section needs work
 * does murder=killing any living thing?
 * expand on idea of "protecting God's creation"
 * Clear and well written and well edited
 * could use more critical thinking

To Do List:

 * Do Work Cited
 * expand our sections
 * Ethics section
 * edit to make the paper flow
 * check to see if it makes at least 12 pages
 * make a cover page
 * Turn it in.

**Shark Finning Proposal:**
Siarrah: my classwork notes

**Links**
Feb 3: Child Labor in China- Kalai Causes in China- Kalai More Causes in China- Kalai Feb:23 [|Shark Finning Prohibition Act]- Kalai Mar. 3 [|Shark Fin Ban Passed in Hawaii]- Weeks [|Shark finning Ban in California]- Weeks [|Extending Ban on finning through Pacific Ocean]- Weeks [|Shark Conservation Act signed by Obama]- Weeks [|Debate of shark finning in Cali]

Catholic Social Teachings: [|Web of creations] [|Caring for creation] <--- this one has the actual document with it [|Catholic teaching and Ecology] < links to other documents about environment

[|Shark finning Ban in hawaii] includes some reasons as to why chinese eat the fin (what they believe)

Group 3: Siarrah Llarinas, Taylor Weeks, Kalai Garcia

Siarrah Topic: 4, 5, 23, 24, 25, 26 Violated: 3

Kalai Topic: 1, 2, 3, 5, 25

Taylor Topic: 2, 4, 5, 23, 24 Violated: 16

Taylor Weeks Child Labor Law in India SS12 February 11,2011 This article is about a recent law created by "Save the Children" in India. This law bans children under the age of 14 to be working in households, hospitals, and restaurants. It also has quotes about child's perspective of their working and why.

Siarrah WP SS12 Feb. 11, 2011

Kala'i WPSRH Social Studies 2/11/11

Taylor Child Labor Ring SS12 February 12, 2011 This article uncover's the evils in large companies' solution to cheap labor without being caught. They kidnap children in rural areas and sell them to factories where they work long hours for low pay.

Siarrah WPSRH #2 Social Studies 2/14/11

Siarrah WP # SS 12 02/22/11 This article is about a proposed ban on shark finning in California, one of America's largest consumers of shark-fin soup.

Kala'i WP #3 SS12 2/23/11

Taylor Weeks WP #3 SS12 February 23, 2011 This article is about a shark finning ban in the UK, but they are having problems completely breaking away from finning.

Taylor Weeks WP #4 SS12 March 1, 2011 This article goes into the detail about the irony in "fear of sharks" and shark fin soup.

Kala'i Garcia WP#4 SS12 March 2. 2011 This article talks about how fishermen don't follow the regulations of fishing laws and how officials aren't regulating the waters.

Siarrah Llarinas WP#4 SS 12 March 1, 2011 This article is about an organization of shark attack survivors petititioning to protect sharks.